Douglas L Perry, The Author blog

July 22, 2009

Rejection #1

Filed under: Books,Thoughts,Writing — douglaslperry @ 6:51 pm
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I sent out 12 partials to Thrillerfest agents this week. They were for two different books, one is my gaming/military thriller, Deadly Mistake, and the others for my mystery/thriller, Blind Power, about a blind woman who’s able to see again after a researcher invents an electronic solution.

The rejection I got was for Blind Power. So the bad news was that it was a rejection. The good news was that I got a very detailed explanation about why the agent didn’t like it. Not enough tension in the first 50 pages. And you know what? He’s right.

Just because I can write a very detailed description about how something works, doesn’t mean I should at the beginning of the book. That’s what I did on this version. I need to suck the reader into the conflicts first, then explain how they got there.

OK, so that was the bad news. The good news is that I know exactly what to do, and while it won’t be easy, it’s not a complete rewrite either.

I want to get started on the next one, but I think I am going to take the time to give this one another shot, and then move on.



  1. It’s hard, sometimes, to know what to do: revise the old work or move on to the new one. But if it’s a matter of rewriting the first 50 pages or so, then I think you should go back to it.

    Comment by dianegallant — July 23, 2009 @ 2:14 am

  2. Yes, what the agent told me was that when I introduced one character, there wasn’t enough tension. I can fix that. I just need to move the conflict with her husband further toward the front.

    Comment by douglaslperry — July 23, 2009 @ 3:39 am

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